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WALT say the lords prayer in Te Reo Maori

E to matou Matua i te rangi

Kia tapu tou ingoa 

Kia tae mai tou rangatiratanga

Kia meatia tau e pai ai 

Ki runga i te whenua 

Ka rite ano ki to te rangi 

Homai Ki a matau mo tenei ra

Murua o matou e Kawea Ki whaka-waia

Engari whakaorangia matou i te kino

Nou hoki te rangatiratanga 

Te kaha,

Me te kororia,

Aka, aka, aka,

Amine.

Rubric

WALT: use a rubric to mark a piece of writing
Success criteria: I will use the rubric to mark then write why I give it the point
I will add the total of points and add a level.

In Tautoro School  we have so many new students who have enrolled in our school. Because of the new enrolments every time we have a  powhiri or assembly we always get squashed, and we feel really uncomfortable. So the facility that is needed in Tautoro School is a new hall.
Why do we need a hall?

First a  hall is needed by Tautoro School because when we have new students enrolling in our school, and every new child needs a powhiri.  There are more students enrolling into our school every week and we are feeling really squashed in our small library.  If we had a hall our manuhiri would feel more comfortable and they would be able to shake everybody's hands without pushing past students and then they would feel very welcomed, comfortable and feel more relaxed.

Secondly: if we had a community hall we would also be able to play sports inside.   If it was raining or if it became too hot.  Then we wouldn't be missing out on our fitness and fitness makes you feel good and it exercises your brain. And this would help students to concentrate more in class.

Another reason why we need a hall is so that we could get a kitchen built in the hall then we would be able to have technology at our school instead of travelling to town to use another school's kitchen.  We would be able to learn how to cook and bake and then we would be able to help our whanau cook and bake at home.


Last of all we need a hall because our community would be able to use the hall in the weekend which will bring all our local communities together for meetings or gala days.

In conclusion, I strongly believe we need a community hall at our school because our  Tautoro school community is growing every week with new students enrolling into our school. It is important that we have a new hall so that we won't be squashed and then we would feel comfortable and then we would listen better because we would all feel relaxed. If we don't have a hall we will always feel squashed and we will not have enough room in our teeny library for new students.

Score   Reasons why you have given this mark
Ideas

5 They have lots of ideas that connect to the topic and each idea is supported by extra information

Structure Language
5 The writing is structured and well,


Organisation
5 The  ideas are organised into  paragraphs

Vocabulary
4 can write a lot of simple words and some extra words to add detail

Sentence Structure
4 They are  beginning to write sentences of different lengths

Punctuation
2 The writer is  starting to use capital letters

Spelling
4 I spell lots of Essentials words correctly

Total
29  3A

Ihumatao

We have been learning about Ihumatao and the land issue. We had to choose a side:  Maori or Settlers and write how it would of been at the time. Here is mine:

Get off this land it’s mine now! I screamed.

 I stood staring at them, I could feel my eyes squinting and my
cheeks blushing.

 You don’t deserve this land  I thought. 

I stared around slowly. Groups of people were having a
meeting, trying to make a plan. 

I could hear shouting and yelling.

I could smell the Maori’s blood.